Sunday, June 6, 2010

SPEND TIME WITH A FAMOUS PERSON

If I could spend time with a famous person, it would be Shakira. Why? because is a nice person, she loves to help people, when I say people I refer children, youths, adults, women. Because she has been a successful person, in her life, her career and everything that she does. I would like spend tme with her because I've been a fan of her, since I was a child. Also because I like her music, everytime she dances, I like her hip movement and because she is beautiful.
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  1. ELI Spring/SummerJune 9, 2010 at 5:43 AM

    How long have you been a fan or hers?

    To work on:

    Fix the sentence where you have 'because she is a nice person. You need to break that up somehow and add a period (maybe after 'people?'). Check every sentence and decide where it ends. When you find the end, put a period.

    --k

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  2. ELI Spring/SummerJune 9, 2010 at 5:43 AM

    oops--
    I made a mistake. My question should read, how long have you been a fan of hers...

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